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god dammit.
i woke up today
feeling just as sick
over you
as i did when i went to bed
last night.

fuck.
i woke up today
wanting to break
everything
in my house
just so i wouldn't be
the only thing
broken.
and lamps, and chairs, and walls.
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andrewpom Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student Writer
this reminds me of a bit from the Catcher in the Rye, the bit where Holden breaks all the windows in his garage when his brother Allie dies. have you ever read that book? the sense of ambiguity you create in this poem and in fact all of your poems is very reminiscent of it. ambiguity adds a layer of sadness, i find. people don't care when you're personal with them.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Huh! I actually hadn't thought of that. I read the Catcher in the Rye a while back, honestly. At least four years ago. It hadn't even crossed my mind! But yeah, I remember that scene.
Yeah, a lot of my literature can be a bit vague. Trying to figure out if it's a bad thing or not, haha.

Thank you kindly for the comment, love! x
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andrewpom Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student Writer
you can probably tell by my quotey signature thingy that TCitR means quite a lot to me. that scene especially. and the ending. ambiguity is not a bad thing, btw! -at least not in my opinion.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
It was, honestly, one out of the two (possibly three) books that I had to read for a class and ended up loving. It's wonderfully written, the plot is great--and it's sad, and beautiful, and ugh. I understand. I love the book. (:

And oh! Well, I'm glad, then. C:
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andrewpom Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student Writer
good god, everyone in my class thought it was awful! my class was full of bloody hipsters. i'm not even kidding. english is seen as a sort of a doss a-level. they kept saying how it was "saaaad" and that it "had no plot" etc. they were exactly the sort of morons that j.d.salinger was trying to speak out against, if you want to know the truth.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
UGH< I UNDERSTAND.
I was in a...class of not so open-minded kids, who didn't see anything out of the box. They didn't even want to try and understand. And it makes me sad, because it's such a beautiful novel. However, they probably don't deserve the beauty of it anyway, if they don't want to take the time to see it.

And yeah, I get what you mean!
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andrewpom Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Student Writer
it just made me think because the entire novel is about society's neglect of the depressed. and the people in my english class - the sort of people that think life is always about happy endings, that depression is something that you can just 'get over' - were exactly the people that Holden hated.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 4, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Exactly. You just can't get over it.
It's like. Trying to climb up a hill that gets steeper every moment. It starts out, you're getting it, but it gets steeper and steeper and you kind of can't walk up walls.
It's not just something you can do.

And they're exactly the type of people Holden hated. They're not understanding, they don't even try.
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forbravery Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Student Writer
I feel the same way sometimes, and it really sucks -_- I'm glad that this piece is so relate-able, but I'm sorry for your loss. *gives glue* maybe you can start patching things up now. ;)
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Aw, you're a cutie. *accepts glue* thanks. C': I'll see what I can do. XD

And, yeah. I felt like a lot of people deal with anger and heartbreak as well, so I mean, I figured some people might understand.

Thanks for taking the time to comment! x

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