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i know
you said
that you wanted me

but the truth is
you want her
as well

and i know
you might not
understand this

but you
can't have
both.
Trying to work on short things.
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CurtainRodFace Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I'm crying now...
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Jul 20, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry :( Please don't cry! :(
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CurtainRodFace Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
It's not your fault in the slightest. I just had this happen to me with one of my best friends who I was kind of in love with... But apparently it wasn't mutual. That's all. Not your fault at all.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, darling.

That's the story behind this, too. As cliche as it is. My--I had (have? Not sure) feelings for someone, and they...they wanted me, sort of, but someone else more. And they led me on, when they actually didn't give a shit about me all that much, honestly.

So, I understand. And I'm so sorry. I hope you're hanging in there. Writing this made me a little stronger about the situation. They /cannot/ have both. You (and I) deserve better. I just want you to know.

Hang in there, love.
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CurtainRodFace Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I needed to hear that so badly...

Hurts (partially because he told me the same thing after my ex broke up with me) but it's true. Even if they seem wonderful, we deserve better. People who hurt us aren't really worth the pain.

I shouldn't take any consolation in this, since that would just be rude, but he has no one now. He walked away and lost me, but the other girl was my friend and she gave up on him a long time ago. (She was smarter than me and figured out he wasn't worth it before she got hurt.) Can't help but have my little bitch side be kinda pleased with that, though. :/

I'm sorry you went through something similar. I wouldn't wish it on anyone. If you need someone to talk to, I'm here.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
No, it's okay to take consolation in it. You feel immensely gratified that he's alone because he made /you/ hurt, and it's only human nature to be satisfied when the person who broke your heart doesn't have an ideal situation. I don't blame you.
He clearly doesn't know what he wants, with this two-person thing--same in my situation. They don't really /know/, and they want both, but they can't have both. They think they can just have it easy, but at the end of the day, you always want one at least a little bit more.
You should be pleased! I'd be pleased, too.
In my case, they're almost sort of with someone, so I don't get that satisfaction. But I guess I sort of want them to be happy, anyway.

No, it's alright. It's been about 5 months since the incident. Still hurts, sometimes, but I manage.
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MartinSilvertant Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Professional General Artist
It's a really simply poem regarding choice of words and the lack of rhyme, and the content is very cliché; and yet, I find this poem to be absolutely striking. What I also find interesting is that—as much of a grammar- and typography nazi as I am—at the beginning of the poem the use of a lowercase "I" bothered me, but by the end of the poem I thought it was a great choice. It makes it feel more genuine and spontaneous, like something you wrote half consciously on a random piece of paper.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm going to start with the grammar and typography nazi thing, because I'm totally the same. Except when I write poetry, most of the time I find myself liking the effect of all lowercase letters, for some reason.
I'm glad it didn't take away from the poem! And I'm glad you found it striking. I love simple poetry just as much as I like complexities.

Just, thank you so much again! I really appreciate this.
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MartinSilvertant Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Professional General Artist
It's a nice visual trick, but I do think you should be careful with that. I don't think it should become something which characterizes your work, but rather it should fit the poem in particular. In this case it worked, but in your other works the use of lowercase doesn't really seem to relate to the content.
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brokenfragilethings Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks for telling me. (: I appreciate it! I know it's probably not something for everyone, but with the way I write, I really like the way it looks.
It's just a personal like of mine. I like the get across the sort of 'scribbled down' sort of look. Most of the things I write aren't pre-thought about. I write in, what I like to call, 'word vomit'. However I'm feeling comes out.
I write poetry because I'm not good with talking about my feelings with other people, so I use a keyboard and a blank document instead.

However, like I said about the font size, I will keep it in mind! Thank you. (:
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